English essay what do you think?

Okay first I'm going to tell you the things that I thought were good about your essay. I really like how you expanded your vocbulary and used more descriptive and just bigger words in general, trust me this really makes a difference. I learned this amazing Essay structure. It's called the 5 paragraph essay structure.. lol or something like that. First paragraph is the into, next three are the points you are going to be making and then the last paragraph is for the conclusion which should tie back in with your intro. I know this sounds like a lot of work, but believe me, once you get the structure down it isn't so bad and it helps you cover all your points. Your sure to get a good grade on it if you follow the 5 paragraph essay structure. Good content though.